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Tired arms and shaking eyes,
Colors that the mind denies,
Mystic waters just below,
Where the golden trinkets go.

Little ones of green and clovers,
Sing about a land right over,
With the winding yellow street,
And the red-shoed witch that no one can beat.

In the Bible,
Tales of a flood,
Where people drowned in flesh and mud.

Yet they use it as their symbol.

Deny his name,
For now we're fine.

Blaspheme his faith,
For now we're safe.

He promised,
With vibrant pastel colors,
Never,
Never again.
©2003-2009 ~lynxmakingknown
:iconlynxmakingknown:

Author's Comments

I originally started writing this to try and write something...not so dark. And what's the most non-dark thing...? Rainbows of course. But it ended up just a bit dark. It has a few other little things in there. I don't know...for some reason I've become stuck on Christianity; even though I am not a Christian myself.

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:iconkoukris:
This is really good-I like the Christian themes you place in there!!! :+favlove:

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:iconclipcat:
Greetings!..... not bad...my critique: it looks like two/2 poems in one

what U tryin' to get our money/time's worth here buddy! :=P :thumbsup: :coffeecup:

Really liked the 1st 2 stanzas however the rest is going off somewhere in History.

The 1st stanza was really the best for me - It really shined. I think the first 2 stanzas

can stand alone!! Maybe a little :juggle: around w/the rest of it ay Lynxster! :boogie: :#1:

> Gonna send you an email that's 'Hot off the press'...in regards to yer other comment...??? :confused:

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:iconcybil88:
well poem is not very bad or good either , i offer you to try some other subjects =) by the way, is it you on the picture? =D
:iconnotyourgina:
wow your poem is really cool and inspiering to me
:iconlysha93:
i like how you changed this poem up
it started out a traditional rhyme and you kinda of slowed it down changed the beat and made it mean something

Kudos i think you did well
:+fav:

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